Thee first chapter
Bob wakes up at a table feeling sick.
Having never being sick before he is confused (at this point humans are super
evolved at fighting off germs.) It scared him that he could hear none of the
cars on the world-wide city. Suddenly I realize I'm trapped in an underground cavern!
I open my eyes and see a strange black-cloaked
man standing in the corner.
“ah”
he said
“you're awake.”
he explains the obvious I'm in a cavern deep underground, but it catches me off guard when he says
“I
brought you down here because there is an assassin trying to kill you.”
That caught me by surprise.
“What
do you mean an assassin? I have done nothing wrong.” my voice hitting an undesirable level of squeakiness.
“That
man” he explained patiently“is
after something you own.”
“Then
why not steal it?” I ask.
“because” he said a note of irritation
creeping into his voice. “it will only work for your family
until you're all dead.”
I thought it best to shut up then
because not only did it make sense, but I didn't want to annoy this man any
further. Suddenly a question popped into my mind that I had to ask.
“which
possession?”
the man sighed and said “we
are not sure.”
“Not
sure. Not Sure!” I squeaked with increasing intensity. He said the plan was to
throw me and him back in time to find out!
“no!” I scream!“let me out! Let me out!”
Practically
losing my voice.
Tune in next time for more of Bob the Unwilling Time-Traveler
Dear Connor,
ReplyDeleteWow! You know how to hook in your readers! I also noticed that you used some great descriptions like "undesirable level of squeakiness." This really helped me picture what was going on in your story. Nice work :)
Danielle Metzler (5th Grade Teacher)