Wednesday, July 17, 2013

Bob the unwilling Time-Traveler

                            Thee first chapter


Bob wakes up at a table feeling sick. Having never being sick before he is confused (at this point humans are super evolved at fighting off germs.) It scared him that he could hear none of the cars on the world-wide city. Suddenly I realize I'm trapped in an underground cavern!
   I open my eyes and see a strange black-cloaked man standing in the corner.
  “ah” he said
  “you're awake.”
he explains the obvious I'm in a cavern deep underground, but it catches me off guard when he says
  “I brought you down here because there is an assassin trying to kill you.” That  caught me by surprise.
 
  “What do you mean an assassin? I have done nothing wrong.” my voice hitting an undesirable level of squeakiness.
  “That man” he explained patiently“is after something you own.”
  Then why not steal it?” I ask.
   “because” he said a note of irritation creeping into his voice. “it will only work for your family until you're all dead.”
   I thought it best to shut up then because not only did it make sense, but I didn't want to annoy this man any further. Suddenly a question popped into my mind that I had to ask.
  “which possession?” 
   the man sighed  and said we are not sure.”
  Not sure. Not Sure!” I squeaked with increasing intensity. He said the plan was to throw me and him back in time to find out!
no!” I scream!let me out! Let me out!” Practically losing my voice. 

Tune in next time for more of Bob the Unwilling Time-Traveler

1 comment:

  1. Dear Connor,
    Wow! You know how to hook in your readers! I also noticed that you used some great descriptions like "undesirable level of squeakiness." This really helped me picture what was going on in your story. Nice work :)
    Danielle Metzler (5th Grade Teacher)

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